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First Steps I: First Flight [Chapter 6]

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Author's Note: This story is not to be confused with the far more famous story First Flight written by @KSK. His story can be found here. If you mistook my story for that, then move along. There's nothing to see here.
While we're at it, please note that before you report this post for infringing on the title, know that I have spoken to KSK and he has graciously agreed to let me use this title. This is the relevant PM that was sent to me:

On 1/20/2017 at 3:32 PM, KSK said:

Hi TotallyNotHuman,

I know that feeling - not having the time to catch up with other stories on the forum because I'm too busy writing my own!

You're welcome to use First Flight as a title but thanks for asking and if you could put a link to my story somewhere that would be great! Let me know if/when it goes live and (if you'd like), I'll post a short note on your thread just confirming that I'm OK with the title in case anyone else decides to comment on it.

Good luck with the writing!

Cheers,

KSK.

With that out of the way, let us begin...

First Flight is a story set in the 29th century, 70 years after the first FTL test flight and about 250 years after the founding of the Space Program. This story will chronicle the adventures of the KFS Scalpel, the first ship that is sent out into interstellar space to investigate a mysterious radiobright star. Because FTL travel is still maturing, they will spend 10 years in transit. What they find at the star in 10 years' time will forever change kerbal's understanding of the universe, and what lies beyond.

Spoiler

OOC is serious business:

In a departure from my usual routine (shoehorning my stuff into the Forums editor and praying for the best), I'll post each chapter in Markdown form to GitHub instead (because of lack of a better hosting solution).

Updates will be on Tuesday at midnight EDT. Expect a standard deviation of approximately five minutes either way; do keep in mind that I wrote this in Word, and therefore have to run it through a Markdown converter before I post it on GitHub.

First Flight will be part one of a three-part series entitled First Steps. Part Deux is in the works, and I'm pushing for its publication before First Flight is done.

Not sure when the next First Flight chapter will be out? Look no further! Click here for the countdown towards the next chapter, provided courtesy of timeanddate.com.

 

Table of Contents

Part One: Countdown

Chapter 1 [03/14/17]

Chapter 2 [03/21/17]

Chapter 3 [03/29/17]

Chapter 4 [04/04/17]

Chapter 5 [04/11/17]

Part Two: Relay

Chapter 6 [04/18/17]

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Chapter 1 is here. Due to some Forums shenanigans (damn you, automerge), I was only able to post it as a separate comment now. Anyway.

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On 3/14/2017 at 1:05 AM, TotallyNotHuman_ said:

Chapter 1 is here. Due to some Forums shenanigans (damn you, automerge), I was only able to post it as a separate comment now. Anyway.

I like your reference to Star Trek Enterprise :D

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Posted (edited)

I knew someone would notice it!

Keep an eye out for more references (both ST and otherwise).

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Yes, both you and Kuzzter have the same problems, mimicking star trek(Its not like I'm NOT a fan of star trek, I enjoy it a lot) 

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"Kouston, we have several problems, but that doesn't matter so we want to continue on with the mission."

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47 minutes ago, TotallyNotHuman_ said:

I knew someone would notice it!

Keep an eye out for more references (both ST and otherwise).

Yeah, I haven't seen that series in a long time, but the moment I started reading it, I was like, I know I've seen this be- Star Trek Enterprise, pilot episode!

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12 hours ago, Alpha 360 said:

Yes, both you and Kuzzter have the same problems, mimicking star trek(Its not like I'm NOT a fan of star trek, I enjoy it a lot) 

The 'problems' you mention are nonexistent. Go to TVTropes and read this. You'll find that many derivative works have shout-outs to their parent works or entirely different works. There is nothing wrong with a nod to another work.

Case in point: The Savage Chicken from the Freefall webcomic. You'll notice that its call sign is 1071-CCN. Oh, noes! It's the Enterprise's call sign backwards! Get the pitchforks! Get the torches! Get the lawyers!

Does this happen at all?

The answer is no. Content creators do not give a flying (bleep) if you give a shout-out to them. Often, they welcome it. So no, these are not problems.

In the future, I would also suggest that you take a couple of grammar classes.

But wow. Mentioning Kuzzter and myself in the same breath. I'm honored, though the circumstances are anything but.

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Posted (edited)

It is a joke, but still, I see everyone making references to it. Sorry about that, I don't mean any offense, I am just a very sarcastic person, and the grammar..... i don't want not to talk about it.

(Beware, joke above, the real answer to your grammar question is that I hate proofreading my posts:))

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"Kouston, we have several problems, but that doesn't matter so we want to continue on with the mission."

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Understood.

Sorry about my tone earlier; I was running on a near non-existent amount of sleep. All is forgiven.

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39 minutes ago, Alpha 360 said:

It is a joke [...] very sarcastic person

Poe's Law says you should always make sarcasm explicit. Around here, that usually means suffixing a ":sticktongue:" or a ":P" to the joke in question.

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Posted (edited)

Right, I unfortunately am gaining a reputation for making sarcastic remarks concerning petty things, this is.... unfortunate:/

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"Kouston, we have several problems, but that doesn't matter so we want to continue on with the mission."

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Chapter 2 has landed. Sorry about the short chapter this week; there isn't much going on in-universe.

Next time on First Flight: Commander Enman learns how (not) to consume hydrazine responsibly, among other things.

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Obligatory 'OP is an dumS' post:

Yesterday (my time), standardized testing swept through my school like wildfire. Because midnight EDT corresponded to noon my time, and my class took the standardized test during 5th hour [12:00 ~ 12:50], I was not able to send it in time. Astonishingly, I managed to forget about it until bedtime last night, at which point I went "oh, frak".

Chapter 3 will be airing (hopefully) same kerb-time, same kerb-channel today.

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Chapter 3 is live after an unreasonably long delay. Well, not unreasonably long... you get the idea.

Next time on First Flight: SPAAAAACE stuff actually starts happening. It's just like Interstellar, y'know? There's actually no SPAAACE stuff until the 50-ish minute-mark in Interstellar. Hmm.

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I'm on a streak. Not necessarily a good one, mind you. This is the second time in a row I've failed to post on time. Anyway - Chapter 4!

Next time on First Flight: Our intrepid crew departs for 1451-1 R3III 203, and thus concludes Part One.

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6 hours ago, Readerty2007 said:

So far so good.

Thanks! Glad you like it.

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Chapter 5 is live, and on time, to boot! This chapter concludes Part One.

Next time on First Flight: our intrepid explorers arrive at the star.

At this point, I have a favor to ask of you readers - could you all contribute some detailed constructive criticism? Just showering me with rep isn't a very detailed representation of what you like (or don't like) about my story. That way, I can know what I can improve in any of my future works, which there will be plenty of. Hopefully.

Otherwise, Scalpel & Co. will keep on rockin'. Stay tuned for the next chapter.

Thanks for all the views and rep.

TNH.

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With my iPad's dying gasps of breath, I bring you Chapter 6 and the beginning of Part II.

Next time on First Flight: The inklings of a nascent colony begin to form.

On a somewhat related note, today's my birthday! :cool:

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Part I? Huh?
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Happy Birthday!

A fine update to celebrate it with too. :) 

Edit:  As you were looking for feedback, I have one minor formatting request. I get that you don't want to put Alpha's speech in quotation marks to differentiate it from the rest of the crew - that's fine. But using italics or  < > brackets or some other marks instead would help to make it more readable.

Cheers.

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D'aww thanks, @KSK. Nice of you to take time away from your writing to wish me well.

Regarding the date - I had planned for FF to go live on Monday, March 13, but I completely forgot. So, I aired it on π Tuesday. Who knew my birthday would land on a Tuesday as well? :confused:

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@KSK - regarding your suggestion about the formatting: yes, it was intended to be in a monospace font. However, the conversion to Markdown mangled things slightly.

They will be receiving a quick refactor that makes Alpha's speech and all bold segments (which was supposed to be Courier New Bold) be in a monospace font instead of a proportional font, as is right and proper.

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